http://unpublicguy.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] unpublicguy.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] glambertrock 2011-03-08 10:48 am (UTC)

Long way from Conway (45 part 2/?) - Proper Comment *1*


some errors that I found so far...
(not sure whether am pointing it right though since you're the official writer... LOL
oh..am BOLDing the error.. :p)

"Ben, just go up, pay your dollar, and then sing your song. Everything will go smoothly after that. I promise."
- probably missing word "THERE" after the word UP?

he was just their for Ben
Soon, knowing that their would probably be people wanting to sing after them,
Cass and I got together by singing up their tonight!
- am pretty sure it's suppose to be "THERE"

Just a hour or two more
- a -> an

Like I said... it's only a minor grammar error. LOL. I only understand the word THEIR is supposed to be THERE after re-read it for the 3rd time. LOL. Oh well, whatever~

TBC~

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